The Hand

For all members who enjoy writing poetry or who use poetry to express their strongest emotions.
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confused @39
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Post by confused @39 » Sat Nov 12, 2011 4:56 pm

The boat tossing and ducking
the waves rocking it
threatening to pull it under

A thin string tied to the boat
a gentle, firm hand holding the string.

A voice "It's not time to go under."
The hand holds tight.
The string stretched taut.

The boat is overcome.
The string holds tight
The hand tugs gently

The boat tossing and ducking
The hand holds tight.

catfish
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Post by catfish » Sat Nov 12, 2011 6:01 pm

Wow, so good. That voice, that hand, I love them for saving you. This is beautiful.
Catfish

confused @39
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Post by confused @39 » Fri Dec 02, 2011 10:19 pm

Thank you catfish. I've had a lot of water imagery lately.

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Post by catfish » Mon Dec 05, 2011 1:11 pm

Wish I could write music. These would be great words for a song
Catfish

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Post by abusewarrior » Wed Dec 14, 2011 1:05 am

confused,
Really wonderful imagery with the sway of the words and the feeling of being saved....from the motion of the words as if at any moment there is still a chance you could go under. Yet, the calming of the words "tight" and "taut" brings the focus back to something sturdy. Something safe.
Thank you for sharing.
AW

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