China Doll

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Chessgirl
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China Doll

Post by Chessgirl » Tue Feb 16, 2021 2:12 am

I’m still working on this one. Just wanted to get an idea down


Stares off
Head in fog
Floating away
China doll

Child paused
I went away
They did this
Growth delay

Parents there
Honor them
Bible says
Don’t be grim

Here I am
They are gone
All grown up
Fate drawn
Chessgirl

Kokoschka
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Re: China Doll

Post by Kokoschka » Tue Feb 16, 2021 9:00 am

Chessgirl,
I'd love to see an aquarell of this. Can picture China Girl floating far away until she gets to a safe shore where she can come out of the water to finally grow skin and flesh. This is really good.

Kokoschka

dancingfish
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Re: China Doll

Post by dancingfish » Tue Feb 16, 2021 11:08 am

Lovely, Chessgirl. Thank you for sharing, I liked this and the feelings you put across in it. :)

Nelll
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Re: China Doll

Post by Nelll » Tue Feb 16, 2021 11:36 am

Thank you for this Chessgirl,
It paints an image that is soft yet sad.

Nll
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Crow
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Re: China Doll

Post by Crow » Tue Feb 16, 2021 11:48 am

I echo these thoughts above.

Crow

Chessgirl
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Re: China Doll

Post by Chessgirl » Tue Feb 16, 2021 1:22 pm

Thank you everyone! It feels unfinished but still, you all made me feel better about what I have down so far!
Chessgirl

there
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Re: China Doll

Post by there » Tue Feb 16, 2021 3:53 pm

Chessgirl,
I really see and feel this! Thanks for sharing it.
All women are beautiful. Period.
I deserve better than survival.

Chessgirl
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Re: China Doll

Post by Chessgirl » Tue Feb 16, 2021 3:55 pm

Thanks there! I’m so glad you liked it!
Chessgirl

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