Joy List -poem

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there
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Joy List -poem

Post by there » Fri Nov 23, 2018 11:44 pm

My Joy List

pink sunsets,
candy cigarettes,
a belly laugh
a photograph
stars at night
scars from a righteous fight



a purring cat
a party hat
tears that cleanse
rules that bend
an orange moon
a whistled tune

the warmth of your hand
bare feet in sand
the river's flow
angels of snow


a gentle breeze
a pile leaves
the smell of rain,
the end of pain

Anything I missed?

a tender kiss
imperfect pitch
'Paris is always a good idea.' --Audrey Hepburn

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by solana » Sat Nov 24, 2018 5:59 pm

i love this! made me smile :)

really like how you included tears and scars in a way that shows them in a positive light.

very nicely written.
You are stronger than you know.

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by there » Sun Nov 25, 2018 12:09 am

thank you, solana :)
'Paris is always a good idea.' --Audrey Hepburn

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by there » Sun Nov 25, 2018 3:27 am

think I'd substitute 'freedom from debt"
for "candy cigarettes" :)

too late to edit
'Paris is always a good idea.' --Audrey Hepburn

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by there » Sun Nov 25, 2018 8:14 pm

'paid off debts'...that's it!
'Paris is always a good idea.' --Audrey Hepburn

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by solana » Thu Nov 29, 2018 8:48 pm

that is perfect!!! ah, to be debt free :)
You are stronger than you know.

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by wolfspirit » Fri Nov 30, 2018 2:43 am

Love this poem <3 <3
so rhythmic and visual
Wounds are where the light enters you.
Rumi

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by there » Mon Dec 03, 2018 7:08 pm

thank you, ws :)
'Paris is always a good idea.' --Audrey Hepburn

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by Couragetoday » Tue Dec 04, 2018 10:33 pm

Lovely there.
Ty for sharing.

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Re: Joy List -poem

Post by there » Sat Dec 08, 2018 3:24 pm

thanks, Ct :)
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